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 Post subject: Level 4 Castle
PostPosted: 03 Jun 2012, 11:30 
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Joined: 31 May 2012, 19:43
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There are a few issues with the current wording of the "Level 4 Castle" quest, that make it a bit difficult for native English speakers to understand what the quest text is trying to say. I suspect it is just as unclear for those to whom English is a second language.

I have emboldened the phrases in the original text which logically make no sense:

Quote:
Your Majesty!
The City grows and your people are content. It’s time to explore the territories surrounding your city, but we need to upgrade the Castle to the highest level and to expand the City Wall. Of course, such an upgrade requires a lot of resources and our builders’ time. But it is worthwhile. As soon as the Castle reaches the highest level the possibility to develop villages outside the city wall will open up for us. However, there is a way to cut down the construction time. I will reveal the secret to you. There is the Ancient Magic enclosed in the Black Gems. It allows completing all the running constructions in an instance.



Objective: upgrade the Main Building to Level 4

Hint:
The highest level the Capital Castle can be upgraded to is 5. After the highest level has been reached, the ability to construct buildings in villages will open up for us. (This is understandable, but the wording is...cumbersome)Your neighbours can also construct their buildings in the villages so hurry up and occupy them first. If you decide to found a new City, be aware that the City’s level will be limited to the level of the square where you are going to found it.
If you want to instantly finish all constructions for the Black Gems (Again, cumbersome and not easy to read), click the Treasure Chest icon in the bottom left corner, choose the "Local services" tab and click the "Purchase" button against the "Complete all constructions instantly" option.


What I would suggest is to make changes where the wrong word has been used, which changes the actual meaning of the sentence. Something like this, I would suggest, though obviously it doesn't have to be exact. I have marked my changes with italics in the version below:

Quote:
Your Majesty!
The City grows and your people are content. It is time to explore the territories surrounding your city, but first we need to upgrade the Castle to its highest level and expand your City Wall. Of course, this upgrade will require a lot of resources and our builders’ time. But it is worthwhile. As soon as the Castle reaches the highest level we can start developing the surrounding villages. However, there is a way to cut down the construction time. I will reveal the secret to you. There is Ancient Magic held in the Black Gems. You can use this magic to complete all curent construction projects in an instant.



Objective: upgrade the Main Building to Level 4

Hint:
The highest level the Capital Castle can be upgraded to is 5. Once the castle reaches level 5, we gain the ability to construct buildings in the surrounding villages. A word of warning: Your neighbours can also construct their buildings in the villages so hurry up and occupy the best squares first. If you decide to found a new City, be aware that the City’s level will be limited to the level of the square where you are going to found it.

If you wish to instantly finish all ongoing constructions with the power of Black Gems, click the Treasure Chest icon in the bottom left corner, choose the "Local services" tab and click the "Purchase" button against the "Complete all constructions instantly" option. All construction timers currently counting down will instantly finish.


It is wordier, but the flow is easier to read, the meaning far more precise, and avoids using any longer words for non-native English speakers that they are not already likely to know.


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 Post subject: Re: Level 4 Castle
PostPosted: 12 Jun 2012, 10:53 
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Joined: 11 Jun 2012, 10:43
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i was really confused by this quest so thank you for making it clearer to a native english speaker :D thanks from the UK x


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